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From: Steve Jackson <>
Subject: Canada in 2020
Date: Sun, 16 Jul 2006 13:40:43 -0500

Cheers for making the attempt.

I do not understand the first sentence, and fear that casual readers  
may find it offputting. It doesn't properly introduce the theme.

"In the year 2020 no-one expected that one of Canada's biggest  
problems would be life-saving technology. "

The whole essay is about how life-saving technology comes to exist,  
and flowers in 2019. (Optimistic, I agree, but it's an essay.) So in  
2020, the technology is not a problem at all . . . it's an asset!

Perhaps what you want is something more like:

"In the year 2020 one of Canada's greatest assets was its life-saving  
technology."

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