X-Message-Number: 29122
From: Kennita Watson <>
Subject: Last chance for input
Date: Sat, 10 Feb 2007 15:57:06 -0800

I've made what I think are the last changes to the Q&A for
the Frozen Dead Guy Days program.  It reads a little choppier
to me, but according to Word it's more readable.  I've lowered
the percentage of passive sentences from 25% to 11%, raised
the Flesch Reading Ease score from about 32 to 39.1 (they
suggest aiming for 60-70), and lowered the
Flesch-Kincaid Grade Level from 12 to 11.1 (suggested: 7.0-8.0).

I don't think I can raise the readability any more without
making it longer.  It also occurs to me that I'm not writing
for people in this group (who have reading grade levels more
like 14.0-16.0) to read :-) .

Send any comments directly to me, thanks!

Live long and prosper,
Kennita

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Q: What is cryonics and why do I care?
A: Cryonics is an experimental technology that seeks to preserve  
human life at temperatures below -150 degrees Celsius (-238 degrees  
Fahrenheit).  This is cold enough to completely stop biological  
decay.  By contrast, Grandpa Bredo is stored in dry ice at only about  
-80 degrees C (-110 degrees F).  Decay slows at that temperature, but  
does not stop.  Cryonics patients must be declared legally dead  
before they are quickly cryopreserved.  Using CPR to revive persons  
once considered dead is now routine.  The goal of cryonics is to  
suspend patients after legal death but before irreversible clinical  
death.  They remain in that state until medical technology can  
restore them to full health.  In the future, nanotechnology will be  
able to do this by healing damage at the cellular and molecular levels.

Q: How many people have done cryonics and where are they?
A: More than 150 people and dozens of pets have been cryopreserved  
since the first case in 1967. More than 1500 people worldwide have  
made legal and financial arrangements for cryonics. Most often,  
payment is by life insurance policy.  One of three organizations that  
preserve and store patients today is Alcor Life Extension Foundation  
(www.alcor.org, 1-800-GO-ALCOR) in Scottsdale, Arizona.  The second  
is Cryonics Institute (www.cryonics.org, 1-586-791-5961) in Clinton  
Township, Michigan.  The third is the newly formed KrioRus (http:// 
www.kriorus.ru/english.html, +7-905-768-04-57) near Moscow, Russia.   
Visit those sites and/or www.gocryo.org to find out more.

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